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Thanks.  I read through it another dozen times.  Kept picking off little things here and there, but it’s a wrap now and sent off.

I removed most the “then” – I’ve gotten into the habit of using them to keep the sentences moving forward, guess I need to watch that.

You’ll notice the two I left in were at the two worst catastrophes so figure that’s warranted – Then,…

It’s good to have stuff like that pointed out, least gives one a chance to think it over, and helps on justify or kill the baby.

When it finally works out, it feels satisfying.

TimB, thank’s for the good cheer from the balcony section 😉